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THE TALKING SPACE

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THE TALKING SPACE

by John Yeo

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Image source PHOTO PROMPT-Copyright-Melanie Greenwood

 Our house is large, built to a grand design. Cleo flounced in the front door looking flustered. “Father I need to talk, can we go to the table?”  I smiled inwardly, we have a round table and chairs on the patio, where family matters are discussed in private. “Of course,” I replied. “Come.”  

“I’m in deep trouble and I need money from you urgently! “  The words came out very fast, furious and aggressive. “Now hold on, what do you need this money for?” “Sorry Dad, my car is in need of urgent repair”. I sighed and reached for my wallet.

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3 thoughts on “THE TALKING SPACE

  1. Dear John,

    This doesn’t sound at all like fiction to me. 😉

    Some minor grammatical issues. The first line should end in a period I think. It feels like a complete sentence.
    “Of course,” I replied. “Come.” You seem to be missing quotation marks there.
    Also I’m wondering why you centered the whole thing to look like a poem? I find it a bit distracting. But that’s me.

    At any rate, as a parent. I relate to this. We raised three boys and they were very hard on cars and our insurance policy.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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